Month: October 2018

For this blog I chose to read chapter eleven in They Say, I Say . I chose this chapter because it is about revision. It has a checklist of things to look for in your essay. For this I chose to focus on the section about how to represent what others say. To do this I added a whole new paragraph to my essay. It was a counterclaim that focused mainly on Bosloughs view. I used to checklist to make sure my paragraph was supported and thorough.

Added Paragraph:

Many people argue that art and science do not need each other. They believe that there is no use in combining them and that they are just too different. For example, in Mark B. Boslough’s article, “We Must Protect U.S. Investment in Scientific Knowledge”, he argues that science should be left alone. He describes science as “under attack”. He focuses on how people see science from other views and how that negatively affects research. Science gives us knowledge and he believes people are ruining that. But if art were incorporated then people may not see science the same way. They may see it as innovating rather than boring. Some people that do not even believe in scientific reasoning may even consider it depending on how the theory is shown or explained. Art can help  develop the skills that some scientists may need to support their case and get the proper funding or communal support that they need.

After reading Anne Lamott’s “Shitty First Drafts” I felt a lot better about the way I put together my first draft. I also just write down whatever my thoughts are with no specific order. I just get all my thoughts onto a page. The difference between my first drafts and Anne Lamotts is that mine aren’t usually long enough. I do not have a problem with overwriting, I struggle because I don’t write enough. I put my thoughts out and thats that. I can explain my opinion in a few sentences so thats what I do. But once I have all my thoughts written I then organize them in order and move around my paragraphs. Once they have a good flow I add more detail to them and more supporting evidence. It usually takes me until my second draft to finally reach my word or page goal.

Revision Plan Strategy:

My goal is to clearly support my thesis, I want to use more evidence from the reading so my thesis is made more valid. I would like at least one or two quotes in all my supporting paragraphs so I will go through the text and my paragraph and see what connects and where I can incorporate a good quote. My biggest challenge will probably be finding quotes that will flow into my paragraphs since this will take multiple times of re reading the text. If I struggle to do this on my own I would feel comfortable reaching out to Professor Emerson or classmates, and if they couldn’t help me either I would also feel comfortable going to SASC for some outside help.